ನನ್ನ ಮೊದಲ ಕಿರುಚಿತ್ರ 'ಮುಗ್ಧಯುದ್ಧ'ಗೆ ಹಲವು ರೀತಿಯ ಪ್ರತಿಕ್ರಿಯೆಗಳು ಬಂದವು.
ಅದರಲ್ಲಿ ಕೆಲವು ಆಯ್ದ ಬರಹಗಳು.
1. Mahesh Kumar Javalkoti (TCSer and an IAS aspirant)
First of all, congrats! it is not easy to make one.. many of us just dream of it, very few like you go for it and I am pretty sure that there gonna be many more efforts from you...
I am a layman in this area but I would try to tell all the things that I felt honestly.. I may be wrong but thats how I perceived it.
Positives -1. Very good effort - especially as it is in local language (Kannada).
2. Camera angles and use of all the facilities in camera are praiseworthy.
3. Sound editing is pretty good.
4. I can appreciate the dedication of your group , Hoge Boys :)
Scope to improve - A little lengthy, length can be reduced
(it actually depends on topic - so I am specifically talking about this particular topic that your team chose)
I found the short film a genuine effort. Its just that people around us are very much used to world-class films & serials that they fail to realise efforts & positives in our local culture. Nevertheless, we need to keep improving so that our local languages, thoughts, cultures & feelings should also survive & find place in mainstream arts-literature.
In this sense, I appreciate your efforts. I will wait for your next works. I am damn sure they will be much better and much deeper...
2. ಉಷಾ ಫಾಟಕ್ (ಖ್ಯಾತ ಲೇಖಕರು ಮತ್ತು ರಂಗತಜ್ಞರು)
ಹೊಗೆ ಬಾಯ್ಸ್ ತಂಡದವರ ಚಿತ್ರ "ಮುಗ್ಧ ಯುದ್ಧ" ಸರಳ ನಿರೂಪಣೆಯ ಉನ್ನತ ಆಶಯದ ಅತಿ ಪುಟ್ಟ ಚಿತ್ರ.
ಮಹಾದೇವಣ್ಣನ ಮಗ ಶಾಲಾ ಬಾಲಕ ಭ್ರಷ್ಟಾಚಾರ ತಡೆಯಲು ತನ್ನದೇ ಮುಗ್ಧವಾದ ಪರಿಹಾರವನ್ನು ಕಂಡುಹಿಡಿಯುತ್ತಾನೆ!
ಆ ಪರಿಹಾರವೇನು ಎಂಬುದು ಇಲ್ಲಿಯ ಸಸ್‍‌ಪೆನ್ಸ್! ಅದನ್ನು ನೋಡಿ ಆನಂದಿಸಬೇಕು ಅಷ್ಟೇ..
ನನಗೆ ಹಿಡಿಸಿದ್ದು
೧. ಸಾರ್ಥಕ ಶೀರ್ಷಿಕೆ "ಮುಗ್ಧ ಯುದ್ಧ".
೨. ಚಿತ್ರ ಕಥೆ.
೩. ಕ್ಯಾಮರಾ ಕೆಲಸ.
೪. ಮುಗ್ಧ ಬಾಲಕನ ಅಭಿನಯ.
೫. ಚೌಕಾಬಾರ ಆಡುವಾಗ ಕಾಯಿಗಳಿಗೆಂದು ಕಾರ್ಪೆಂಟರ್ ಮಗ ಉಪಯೋಗಿಸುವ ಮೊಳೆಗಳು! ಅವುಗಳನ್ನೂ ಮತ್ತು
ಚೌಕಗಳನ್ನು ಬರೆದುಕೊಂಡಿದ್ದ ಹಲಗೆಯನ್ನೇ ಅಸ್ತ್ರವನ್ನಾಗಿಸುವ ನಿರ್ಧಾರ.
೬. ಅಲ್ಲಲ್ಲಿ ಹಿನ್ನೆಲೆಯಲ್ಲಿ ಕೇಳಿಬರುವ ಸಂಗೀತ.
೭. ಚಿತ್ರಕ್ಕಾಗಿ ಪ್ರತ್ಯಕ್ಷ ಪರೋಕ್ಷವಾಗಿ ದುಡಿದವರ ಪರಿಚಯದ ಪರಿ.
ಹೀಗೆ ಮಾಡಿದ್ದರೆ ..?
೧. ಇನ್ನೂ ಗಟ್ಟಿಯಾದ ಚಿತ್ರ ಕಥೆ ಮತ್ತೊಂದೈದು ನಿಮಿಷಗಳ ಕಾಲ ವಿಸ್ತರಣೆ
೨. ಮುಗ್ಧ ಬಾಲಕನೇ ಇಲ್ಲಿ ಕಥಾನಾಯಕನಾಗಿ ಕಾಣುವುದರಿಂದ ಮನೆಯ ಇತರ ಸಮಸ್ಯೆಗಳ ಬಗೆಗೆ ಅವನು ತೋರುತ್ತಿದ್ದ ಅಕ್ಕರಾಸ್ಥೆಯ ನಿರೂಪಣೆ.
೩. ಜಮೀನಿನ ಸಮಸ್ಯೆಯಿಂದ ತಂದೆ ತಾಯಿ ಅನುಭವಿಸುವ ಯಾತನೆ ಮತ್ತು ಅದನ್ನು ನೋಡುವ ನೊಂದುಕೊಳ್ಳುವ ಬಾಲಕ
೪. ತಂದೆಯ ಜತೆಜತೆಗೆ ಬಾಲಕನೂ ಕಚೇರಿಗೆ ಹೋಗಿ ಅಲ್ಲಿನ ಜನರ ವರ್ತನೆಯನ್ನು ಸ್ವತ: ಬಾಲಕ ನೋಡುವುದು.
3. Monish Nagaraj, Owner/Partner at Solis Ventures.
Heyy champ really glad to see your film.. Congrats on all de efforts you have put in.. Really appreciate it.. I watched it. Overall, a very good effort in terms of your first film..Really happy for you
I m sure lot of people would have reacted to the film in many ways by now. People are always ready to comment & advice on films these days. Dont bother about them too much.. It will never stop, even if you make a 100cr film:). But,just suggesting few things to make your next production even better. Take them only if you agree with it..
- The concept that you have chosen is very cliched. I kinda felt it would have worked better if you had chosen to treat it more naturally than dramatically. Editing in this is cliched & traditional. See if you could make it crisper. I felt you could have told this same story in less than 4 min. So just think again as to why you have stretched it to 12??. There are many scenes which add no value to the film. See if you can edit it. Sound needs to be redesigned. Its spoiling the mood. Camera is decent, its going with the mood of the story. Had you done good colour correctioning, it would have looked even better.Also, you need to be very careful with the lip syncs & pronunciations. Full marks to you for using real locations.
These are just few specific observations which I thought would have made your film even better. But again, thats only my opinion:). Dont take it too seriously. I hate finding flaws, but thought should let you know constructively since you have just started off. But do think about them. Again, my wishes are always with you. Will look for more films
4. Rahul Roy, TCS, Kolkata
shashank... Congratulations macha! Tyt hug!
Sch a gd stuff! Proud f u
d story... So true. So innocent.
D direction... Very good! Story tellin... Very good!Cinematography... Very good!
D way u told it... D music... D camera angles... D simple dialoges... D actors... Very good macha! Very nice
ur naratn part in d end also is wel thought of n written. Evrythn is f d std f a gd shrt film! I enjoyd it!
Evn d music... Bang on!
Bt macha... If as a frnd i nd 2 point out a downside dat i felt puld d standrd bak a litle
bit...it wld b d Editing wrk done. Litle disapointin in d editin part...tel u y..
.
Doz many fade outs 2 blak in d begng in d carpntr shop wr distractng a bit.
A few transitn styles lookd unnecsry..coz d level f shrt film u hv made...sch films dnt rly
require so many transitions. FEW WERE GOOD...n necsry! Bt nt al f dem.Drz is 1 scn shwn d fathr's face upset n woried..bt 4 a surprisngly short period f tym...les
dan hlf a secnd i gues!
Bt in al...i told u... Trust me... U hv made a grt film.. Wid a grt story n dirctn!!Lovd ur wrk! Al d best 4 ur great futre!
........
Thank you for reading.. Watch the movie in youtube :)
ಅದರಲ್ಲಿ ಕೆಲವು ಆಯ್ದ ಬರಹಗಳು.
1. Mahesh Kumar Javalkoti (TCSer and an IAS aspirant)
First of all, congrats! it is not easy to make one.. many of us just dream of it, very few like you go for it and I am pretty sure that there gonna be many more efforts from you...
I am a layman in this area but I would try to tell all the things that I felt honestly.. I may be wrong but thats how I perceived it.
Positives -1. Very good effort - especially as it is in local language (Kannada).
2. Camera angles and use of all the facilities in camera are praiseworthy.
3. Sound editing is pretty good.
4. I can appreciate the dedication of your group , Hoge Boys :)
Scope to improve - A little lengthy, length can be reduced
(it actually depends on topic - so I am specifically talking about this particular topic that your team chose)
I found the short film a genuine effort. Its just that people around us are very much used to world-class films & serials that they fail to realise efforts & positives in our local culture. Nevertheless, we need to keep improving so that our local languages, thoughts, cultures & feelings should also survive & find place in mainstream arts-literature.
In this sense, I appreciate your efforts. I will wait for your next works. I am damn sure they will be much better and much deeper...
2. ಉಷಾ ಫಾಟಕ್ (ಖ್ಯಾತ ಲೇಖಕರು ಮತ್ತು ರಂಗತಜ್ಞರು)
ಹೊಗೆ ಬಾಯ್ಸ್ ತಂಡದವರ ಚಿತ್ರ "ಮುಗ್ಧ ಯುದ್ಧ" ಸರಳ ನಿರೂಪಣೆಯ ಉನ್ನತ ಆಶಯದ ಅತಿ ಪುಟ್ಟ ಚಿತ್ರ.
ಮಹಾದೇವಣ್ಣನ ಮಗ ಶಾಲಾ ಬಾಲಕ ಭ್ರಷ್ಟಾಚಾರ ತಡೆಯಲು ತನ್ನದೇ ಮುಗ್ಧವಾದ ಪರಿಹಾರವನ್ನು ಕಂಡುಹಿಡಿಯುತ್ತಾನೆ!
ಆ ಪರಿಹಾರವೇನು ಎಂಬುದು ಇಲ್ಲಿಯ ಸಸ್‍‌ಪೆನ್ಸ್! ಅದನ್ನು ನೋಡಿ ಆನಂದಿಸಬೇಕು ಅಷ್ಟೇ..
ನನಗೆ ಹಿಡಿಸಿದ್ದು
೧. ಸಾರ್ಥಕ ಶೀರ್ಷಿಕೆ "ಮುಗ್ಧ ಯುದ್ಧ".
೨. ಚಿತ್ರ ಕಥೆ.
೩. ಕ್ಯಾಮರಾ ಕೆಲಸ.
೪. ಮುಗ್ಧ ಬಾಲಕನ ಅಭಿನಯ.
೫. ಚೌಕಾಬಾರ ಆಡುವಾಗ ಕಾಯಿಗಳಿಗೆಂದು ಕಾರ್ಪೆಂಟರ್ ಮಗ ಉಪಯೋಗಿಸುವ ಮೊಳೆಗಳು! ಅವುಗಳನ್ನೂ ಮತ್ತು
ಚೌಕಗಳನ್ನು ಬರೆದುಕೊಂಡಿದ್ದ ಹಲಗೆಯನ್ನೇ ಅಸ್ತ್ರವನ್ನಾಗಿಸುವ ನಿರ್ಧಾರ.
೬. ಅಲ್ಲಲ್ಲಿ ಹಿನ್ನೆಲೆಯಲ್ಲಿ ಕೇಳಿಬರುವ ಸಂಗೀತ.
೭. ಚಿತ್ರಕ್ಕಾಗಿ ಪ್ರತ್ಯಕ್ಷ ಪರೋಕ್ಷವಾಗಿ ದುಡಿದವರ ಪರಿಚಯದ ಪರಿ.
ಹೀಗೆ ಮಾಡಿದ್ದರೆ ..?
೧. ಇನ್ನೂ ಗಟ್ಟಿಯಾದ ಚಿತ್ರ ಕಥೆ ಮತ್ತೊಂದೈದು ನಿಮಿಷಗಳ ಕಾಲ ವಿಸ್ತರಣೆ
೨. ಮುಗ್ಧ ಬಾಲಕನೇ ಇಲ್ಲಿ ಕಥಾನಾಯಕನಾಗಿ ಕಾಣುವುದರಿಂದ ಮನೆಯ ಇತರ ಸಮಸ್ಯೆಗಳ ಬಗೆಗೆ ಅವನು ತೋರುತ್ತಿದ್ದ ಅಕ್ಕರಾಸ್ಥೆಯ ನಿರೂಪಣೆ.
೩. ಜಮೀನಿನ ಸಮಸ್ಯೆಯಿಂದ ತಂದೆ ತಾಯಿ ಅನುಭವಿಸುವ ಯಾತನೆ ಮತ್ತು ಅದನ್ನು ನೋಡುವ ನೊಂದುಕೊಳ್ಳುವ ಬಾಲಕ
೪. ತಂದೆಯ ಜತೆಜತೆಗೆ ಬಾಲಕನೂ ಕಚೇರಿಗೆ ಹೋಗಿ ಅಲ್ಲಿನ ಜನರ ವರ್ತನೆಯನ್ನು ಸ್ವತ: ಬಾಲಕ ನೋಡುವುದು.
3. Monish Nagaraj, Owner/Partner at Solis Ventures.
Heyy champ really glad to see your film.. Congrats on all de efforts you have put in.. Really appreciate it.. I watched it. Overall, a very good effort in terms of your first film..Really happy for you
I m sure lot of people would have reacted to the film in many ways by now. People are always ready to comment & advice on films these days. Dont bother about them too much.. It will never stop, even if you make a 100cr film:). But,just suggesting few things to make your next production even better. Take them only if you agree with it..
- The concept that you have chosen is very cliched. I kinda felt it would have worked better if you had chosen to treat it more naturally than dramatically. Editing in this is cliched & traditional. See if you could make it crisper. I felt you could have told this same story in less than 4 min. So just think again as to why you have stretched it to 12??. There are many scenes which add no value to the film. See if you can edit it. Sound needs to be redesigned. Its spoiling the mood. Camera is decent, its going with the mood of the story. Had you done good colour correctioning, it would have looked even better.Also, you need to be very careful with the lip syncs & pronunciations. Full marks to you for using real locations.
These are just few specific observations which I thought would have made your film even better. But again, thats only my opinion:). Dont take it too seriously. I hate finding flaws, but thought should let you know constructively since you have just started off. But do think about them. Again, my wishes are always with you. Will look for more films
4. Rahul Roy, TCS, Kolkata
shashank... Congratulations macha! Tyt hug!
Sch a gd stuff! Proud f u
d story... So true. So innocent.
D direction... Very good! Story tellin... Very good!Cinematography... Very good!
D way u told it... D music... D camera angles... D simple dialoges... D actors... Very good macha! Very nice
ur naratn part in d end also is wel thought of n written. Evrythn is f d std f a gd shrt film! I enjoyd it!
Evn d music... Bang on!
Bt macha... If as a frnd i nd 2 point out a downside dat i felt puld d standrd bak a litle
bit...it wld b d Editing wrk done. Litle disapointin in d editin part...tel u y..
.
Doz many fade outs 2 blak in d begng in d carpntr shop wr distractng a bit.
A few transitn styles lookd unnecsry..coz d level f shrt film u hv made...sch films dnt rly
require so many transitions. FEW WERE GOOD...n necsry! Bt nt al f dem.Drz is 1 scn shwn d fathr's face upset n woried..bt 4 a surprisngly short period f tym...les
dan hlf a secnd i gues!
Bt in al...i told u... Trust me... U hv made a grt film.. Wid a grt story n dirctn!!Lovd ur wrk! Al d best 4 ur great futre!
........
Thank you for reading.. Watch the movie in youtube :)
~ಹೊಗೆ
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